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MY RELIGION
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Submitted on: Feb 10, 2005 - 09:53:58 AM
Last Updated: Aug 28 2007 - 02:01:35 PM

Description Ok macjams, need all y'all's help on this one. Originally written in the previous century this is the third iteration of this song. I'm am about to embark on the fourth iteration and thought I'd get your thoughts before i did. I would appreciate any and all thoughts, opinions, suggestions, critcisms etc.

Lyrics My Religion
©1997 Ray Kainz/Sue Ann Kainz

When I looked into your eyes
I thought I saw the flame
your kissed baptized me
and at your feet I prayed

Your body was my alter
were I worshiped every night
my faith was without falter
my will without a fight

You were my religion cross myself three times
Your desires were the trinity and your commands my wine
You were my religion but I'm through with you amen
no more of you amen

My teardrops make a rosary
a prayer as each one falls
no more genuflection
at the slightest of your calls

cuz I don't need your liturgy
to tell me that I'm wrong
confession is my guitar
forgiveness is the song
I don't need your hymnal
to follow when I sing
no I don't need you anymore
this angel's taking wing

You were my religion cross myself three times
Your desires were the trinity and your commands my wine
You were my religion full of false prophetic talk
You were my religion gonna pick up my matt and walk
cuz You were my religion but I'm through with you amen
no more of you amen

Hardware G3, MOTU 2408, Eurodesk 8-bus mixer for keys and guitar/bass, Mackie 24x8 for vox Guitar POD v1.0, '79 Fender strat w/Texas special p.ups, washburn p.o.s. bass

Software: Opode's Studio Vision Pro, T.C. electronics SPARK

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said 1429 days ago

I like the sound...

of this song. All your music to my ear has a professional flavor, as does this tune. As to suggestions, one right off the bat comes to me as I listen. The concept and overall lyrics are good. The religious metaphors and allusions are a unique approach to the man-woman relationship but here seem repetively over done. Like getting hit over the head (just a bit!). I think the singer's lament and declaration concering his woman would be more effective with a subtler approach (fewer direct metaphors).

This input is worth no more than 2 cents from this novice lyricist. :-) Again, good song!
7-8-7-7

	said 1429 days ago
	Excellent Vocals, instruments, production - all excellent. Pleasantly surprised by the instrumental break 2/3 of the way through.

	Peter Greenstone said 1429 days ago
	solid Great production. Pro sound. Everything sounds really good. While I'm sure that there's always room for improvement, I can't think of anything in particular that needs it. I suppose that I agree with Dadai that some of the metaphores could be a little less direct; that might be better, but still good as is.

	frml said 1429 days ago
	sweet! immediately catchy and interesting. i really enjoy the scratchy funky guitar sound. good song. good choice of sounds, i especially like the bridges in the song, they make for a good resolution into the chorus.very nicely put toghether. well done.

	Epileptic Gibbon said 1429 days ago
	Good but not quite right Tip-top production and playing as ever but something doesn't quite work for me. Not quite sure what it is though. Maybe it needs more musical oomph, if you know what I mean. And I agree with previous MacJammers about the metaphors being a bit over-done.

	Epileptic Gibbon said 1427 days ago
	Good but not quite right Looks like I'm in a minority with my thoughts about more musical oomph being required. I'll go and sit in the corner then…

	aclarke said 1429 days ago
	This is nice Very interesting...like how the chorus is a little harder than the verse. I agree with Mungo on the instrumental interlude...nice. Nice jazzy guitar licks at the end and a very cool singing voice! I'm jealous...you can do it all.

	muffclone said 1429 days ago
	funkydelic guitar GOOD FUNKY SOUNDS IN THE GUITAR AND VERY GOOD SONG

	Tom Atwood said 1429 days ago
	What I really like about this song is the extremely funky guitar. Like some of the previous posts, I am not sure all of the religious imagery works for me, or that it all makes sense--desires as trinity, commands as wine, etc. But it's still a funky tune!

TobinMueller said 1429 days ago

sexy Catholic love
Great pro track, excellent sounds, playing, absolutely
tight, great singing, great playing. That chimes entrance
is too sudden maybe and sounded like an edit/cut to me,
but I love the idea behind it. Your separate of sounds,
mixing, pacing, and mastering is fantastic. The funky
aspects drive it forward, but the rock style gives it weight
and substance. I love the song art. Cool sexy Catholic
love song lyrics full of great ironic textures, but I get what
Dadai says about repeating the word Religion so often.
Just love the sound you get and the balanced
arrangement.

	packosmokes said 1428 days ago
	Diggin, diggin', diggin' it! This song just plain works for me from start to finish. I love the sophisticated style it has, but stays loose and rockin' with a bit o' the funk! Faved and Downloaded

	hacked_to_pieces said 1428 days ago
	Works for me as well very cool from start to finish. Many layers of cool guitar sounds nd the production is fantastic.

	alanfraser said 1428 days ago
	Hmmm... Even though I loathe religion, I found the lyrics offensive and couldn't get past them to listen to the tune. But I'm way in the minority. Ignore me.

	Suzanne said 1428 days ago
	one of the best one of the best tracks on this site. a real money maker. mainstream yet with inventive moments, and you doubled voice rocks. you could sing religion to me as many times as you want... PUT OUT YOUR CD SOON! (that chime entrance Tobin mentioned doesn't mix as well , but everything else is PERFECT)

Cori Ander said 1428 days ago

Yes I like it

First of all I like the lyrics — wish I could make poetry like
that — and the content; reminds me of how easy it is in
this world to make idols and pick up gurus and how times
of love affairs are especially susceptible, with acompaning
dangers of devastating illusion. (Dont know if that is what
the song is about, it is the way i associate when listening).

Finally the music is relly tight and professional to my ears.

	Syncopatient said 1427 days ago
	Oh YEA! You've nailed it! Great production, excellent song writing and playing. This is on my IPod....like now! This song is just right to me from beginning to end....nice nice balance...the only thing I hear is the chimes come in a tad strong but are perfectly balanced once there....man, editing is like hours and hours isn't it. Fabulous job...made my day!

	thetiler said 1426 days ago
	Night beat Nice beat Nice sounded voice. Lots of nice tunes in there 4 10"

	Truth42 said 1424 days ago
	Very smooth and slinky This is fantastic, really funky. You have a superb voice. I really like the overall feel of this song. I keep playing it.

said 1424 days ago

Funkified...
song with great timing, production and writing. I kept
wanting to hear the vocals sustained more on the last
word of each verse. Diggin' the pos bass...the
drums...guitar. The direction it goes at the bridge seems a
bit strange. Not that it's a bad thing. Just depends on taste
I guess. It was edgy and raw and bridged to something a
tad too sweet for me. Still, even an unfinished song of
yours is better than 80% of the songs I hear. I'll reserve
vote for the final version. Thx for
sharing.

	MiMi said 1424 days ago
	Outstanding. This is truly a professional sounding track. Your vocals are clean and defined and the story enticing and interesting(open to intrepretation). The performance is firts rate. This is one of the most polished things I have heard here at Macjams!

Cameron said 1424 days ago

professional!
All's been said already, so I won't belabor the religious
aspects.

I particularly liked the way you built up the song from the
beginning. Very good pacing of gradually increasing
intensity.

I would say, now that the song is nearly finished playing,
that somehow this pacing lost a bit of momentum in the
second half of the song. Almost like....it reached a peak
and then didn't know where to go from there. And the
instrumental ending was sort of anti-climatic.

Otherwise, this is certainly a very well-conceived and
produced tune, professional in every way. Some of the
textures and little guitar riffs remind me of Steely Dan.
Now THAT group sure had extremely high production and
performance values! You're in good company.

said 1423 days ago

Mitchell Froom!
Sounds very much like a Mitch Froom production of a
Kevin Gilbert song.

There's a certain "demo-y" quality that I find alternately
right and wrong. At times it's murky and then there's that
crystal clear guitar sound. The vocals sound great too.
Very Froom.

Great instrumental break. I LIKE that changeup that Tobin
didn't, go figure . . .

Yes, you go a little too far with the religious content. Too
cute. The line you cross is a small one, but it's like the 3
joke rule, you know?

Fantastic song overall.

You are my favorite MacJams musician.

ChrisSly said 1423 days ago

I'm a true believer
This tune rocks in every way. The lyrics are consistent
throughout. Reminds me of some of that overwrought
eighties stuff with new century flavorings. The only
quibble I have is that the song kind of peters out oat the
end. There's such a strong, funky beat that the guitar
notes just kind of . . . stop. Maybe add some kind of
supporting sound there, just on those last two notes. A
synth chord? Maybe bass and drums? But something to
really kick the door shut.

said 1401 days ago

Best of the best...
You are so ready to be signed. You and mars are the two "most likely to ink a record deal" on MacJams,IMHO. If you haven't already. Consistent professional production quality is one standard you set around here. You have a raw edge that sounds anything but computer generated. It's "from the gut". And it bleeds cool rebel. Yeah, sometimes, for me, your writing lacks the attack that i think you are vocally capable of. Almost like it'd be cool to hear a some lyrical risks taken...or exploration. But, take my critique with a grain of salt. Cuz i'm nowhere near your league as a musician. Great song. Thx for sharing it here. 4 x 10

	jesushairdo said 1394 days ago
	still very fresh! written in the previous century? wow! still sounds very fresh! reminds me of Lenny Kravitz. awesome! if you want to update the song, id have the rhythm tracks updated. but thats just a minor update. the song is still very strong i reckon.

	rovert10 said 1387 days ago
	Great! Haven't listened to your stuff before.. top songwriting, top performance.

	EdensEve said 1360 days ago
	Like your style You are a discovery. Such interesting sounds yet radio quality. Keeping discovering that boundary on the edge of uniqueness. I really like your style.

	Doadars Uncle said 1352 days ago
	I Like Where it Moves ... It glides. Straight!

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