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 | Lennon714 said 172 days ago |
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Thanks, Ridd The funny thing is that I totally wanted to do like half of the things you brought up. You must hear what I hear. Also, I totally appreciate your frankness. It's obvious the tune needs more. I do want some looped drums in the second verse. I actually have something incredibly specific in mind. The end credits of Moulin Rouge has this great effected drum beat. If I can't find something like it, I'll fake it with Midi, but that's an hour or so. Also I SO want huge feedback swelling in to that second chorus! I tried to do it a few weeks ago but my Marshall just had this stupid whistling feedback and I didn't bother playing with it any more after that. I like where you're going with the quiet whisper break comments. I was considering finding a Japanese lady talking. Not for any other reason than it would sound right. But it still needs something else. I'll also try putting some harmony vox in the second verse to set it apart a bit. Again, thanks for listening and for throwing some critique my way. Loved the acoustic version of Superfriend. LOVED it. |
 | Feter said 172 days ago |
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Only Make Believe Cool Rockin Song ...alot of keys work here ..and its just so cool ...loved the arrangment and all your singin works with the lyrics so good ,Rock on !!!! |
 | dolby said 172 days ago |
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Agree with..... ....rsorensen about the quiet bits. I really like what you're doing here but feel that in the 'atmospheric' bits it needs to be a bit wierder. Can hear some distant feetback or grumbling - can't really say what - but something to make the listener a bit uncomfortable. The chorus/hook is great but I'd push the guitars a bit and really pump them up - the melody will always win out over some extra noise 'cos it's a great hook. Lovely song and production - and credit for really trying to push it. I'd go and get the Flaming Lips records out and see how you can push weirdeness whilst still maintaining the melody. |
 | MarkHolbrook said 172 days ago |
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Only make believe Well I tend to agree with Mr Sorenson. During the softer parts of the song I could see the vocals taking on that compressed sort of far away sound. I think it would really draw the ear to them. Almost like they came over a radio losing some of the lows and mids. That's just what I would like to hear though. In the more busy parts of the song be careful not to add to much reverb to the vox... It might muddy things up. Overall I like the tune. |
 | Vic Holman said 171 days ago |
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I think Ridd gave you enough to work with, so I really can't add anything there. I like the sparsness and the heavier chorus. Great tone on the distorted guitars! |
 | somebuddy said 170 days ago |
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good jarb I don't think I can add anything that hasn't already been said. I would say just add a little something on the transitions and a little percussion on the second verse. I like how it sounds and I'm excited to see (hear) where it's going! |
 | lavalamp said 170 days ago |
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Coolness Like the vox, but can agree with Ridd regarding the comp/reverb thing. This is definitely one of your greatest. Weezer-ish. That's a very good thing. You are a true Beatles disciple. Dave |
 | mr.turtle said 169 days ago |
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Your compositions and Musicianship are some of the best around, but the mix is kind of holding you back. Why not upload a version of this to sendspace. Post the link here. Let some people do a remix. After you hear a version you like have them send you a file that you could study. It's a good way to learn. Just a thought.Or just send a version to rsorensen and let him do it..... :) |
 | egobandit said 167 days ago |
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whew! the holloween keys in the beginning really capture me. Nice mixing in this between the chimes and keys. I think maybe the lead guitar in the heavy part should come up a bit, overall I feel its a great song. Nice bass break after the voices! I enjoyed this allot. |
 | dirigent said 167 days ago |
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Only Make Believe Wonderful song - outstanding!! An unusual choice of sounds, works very well, everything is excellently crafted, bravo! |
 | Lightman- said 166 days ago |
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Great I like the song... The difference between the slow part, and the part with the rock guitar..... A beatiful song.. Very well written.... Like it a lot.... Thanks for sharing.... |
sorry but its hard to criticize a song that is so beautifully mix and sang. For me, the little imperfections adds the to human touch of the song, like the breathing, sounds of finger movements from fret to fret. Stick to this original version, its your style lennon...and its very good.