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There Could Never Be Goodbye
by asconejar

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Submitted on: Jul 20, 2008 - 12:55:09 AM
Last Updated: Jul 20 2008 - 12:55:09 AM

Keywords goodbye (24), past (14), friend (111), love (1000), eyes (19), sides (2)

Description I wrote this song last summer of 1993 as part of our program presentation during our university graduation ball. I asked my classmate, shelly Marie tan nerri, from my marketing subjects to sing this song. Though I’m not really on ballad type of songs, I was so challenged that time to write a song that will fit on that occasion, farewell but not goodbye type of theme… This song is best done in piano, but I can’t really play piano, thus, as usual, it’s done in electric. Drums and percussions (free loops only) are the only software instruments.

Hardware rbx 170, pacifica 112, firebox, at2020,

Software: garage band

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dolby said 172 days ago

A good start
the chord progression reminds me of Freebird - no bad thing and you've started to craft your own melody over the top. The production isn't bad. You have a good basic mix, and the drums are working well - dynamic and well spaced.

Things to think about:

1. Some of you guitar playing is a little out of time (especially the lead breaks) and the bass at times is a little laboured. Just try to tighten things up and don't settle for 'okay is good enough'.

2. Similarly your vocal is alittle out of tune in places. You've got a good vocal level and there's a good melody, but you just need to tighten things up a little. Maybe a few more takes and then select the better ones - it's hard but has to be done:-))

3. I think the song is too long. It either needs to be (at least) two minutes shorter or it needs a captivating middle eight/bridge/solo to keep the listener interested.

Hope you don't mind the (hopefully) constructive remarks. After recent forum discussions I'm trying to avoid just saying "yeah great well done". You have a nice start to a song here, but I think it needs some work to lif it up a few rungs!

All the best,
Phil

Lennon714 said 171 days ago

i
really like where you're going with this tune. I do agree with dolby when he talks about the vocals. Reason being is I can hear strong vocals in certain places. Sometimes I have to lay down a full take of vocals and then go back line for line and get the best I can. It's frustrating, believe me, but the final product comes out so much more better. That being said, it think this song is really good. There's loads of melody.

	mowguy3 said 171 days ago
	There Could Never Be Goodby Very nice tune. I will let the pro's give the advice and just say nice work. Be Well, Russ

	Moviz said 171 days ago
	Yes you were right, I do like this song. Really nice melody and you got a really nice full sound on the backing. Love your guitar solo work and your vocals have just the right amount of feeling..... nice lyrics too, cheers M

	chinaman2 said 160 days ago
	ayos! the mix is very clear. instruments are very well balanced. and of course, the composition is well structured. vocals are heartfelt. sa laundry room pa rin ba ito? baka nagpipigil ka pa?

	said 172 days ago
	There Could Never Be Goodbye It sounds really, really lovely You have done a really good job on this one for sure. Love the Music too And you sing it really good. Well done. I love it. Peace Dee.

	asconejar said 171 days ago
	:) Thanks for the uplifting comments. It makes composing easier with your feedback.

	asconejar said 171 days ago
	a good start Thanks for taking time for the very detailed comments. I will work next time bearing in mind the "good is not enough" if time will allow me then. Hoping that I will get the "proper song" that we all aspire for.

	asconejar said 171 days ago
	vocals I just usually took 2 vocals sets and just select the one I like. Maybe I can work on panning the vocals well. By the way, how can you eliminate the hum in guitar? it took me quite some time to reduce the hum (not ridding it out) but the guitar sustain is also compromised.

	asconejar said 171 days ago
	:) happy to hear that you like the melody, specially from a person who has a very good control on guitar melody.

	asconejar said 166 days ago
	:) thanks for the comments, hoping I can still maintain the "right amount of feelings" on my future posting.

	asconejar said 157 days ago
	:) thanks for passing by and for the very kind comments, yes all my recording here were completed in the laundry room.Ang layo naman ng mix ko sa yo no. I am planning to buy a good headphone monitor, maybe, akg240s. Maybe, next time, I can improve more on my mix. O, akala ko ba collaborate tayo? saan na ang sample track mo? regards

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