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![]() | MarkHolbrook said 177 days ago |
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I think this is outstanding! The subject is killer to say the least and the mix is amazing! Superb in every aspect. This one will require many more listens! Thanks so much for sharing the early one! |
![]() | gail60 said 177 days ago |
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Wonderful post!! Joe I love this song! I agreed with and enjoyed your lyrics very much. You sang well and just did a great job throughout. Very good song!! Thanks Joe. |
![]() | Karmatoburn said 177 days ago |
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love it Buckingham'ish. The mix is stellar. Very clear. The progression rocks, imho, and the sweet nuanced production nuggets, like the voices near the end. That seals it for me. I could hear a hornby's like piano somewhere :-0.... |
![]() | sloparts said 177 days ago |
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Love the Lyrics Joe Says what I've been saying for years, and says it very well. As for the music, it's powerful to be sure and since you said it's your first pass I offer these suggestions. It almost sounds too busy, but I think that's because the levels needs adjusting. You vocal needs to come up a few db so the message takes a more prominent place in the mix. Not a lot mind you, just a notch or two. Some harmony on the choruses might give them even more power for the message. These are just my thoughts after listening to it a few times, so please don't take offense my friend. They are meant as observations from a deaf guy. Other than that, this sound great Joe. It's a wonderful song with the right message and I love it. Can't wait to hear the final version. Take care and thanks for sharing this one. Ed |
![]() | dajama said 177 days ago |
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Excellent song The lyrics are smart, moving and thought-provoking. Your voice sounds terrific here, expressing the words with feeling. I love the guitars here, lovely sounds and nice playing, and the percussion is excellent. The only nit I'd pick with the mix is the bass, which sounds clear but seems (to my wooden ears, and in my headphones) to lack some presence. A very impressive song, and a wonderful sound. Very nicely done. Peace. |
![]() | Jim Bouchard said 177 days ago |
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excellent! What would Ik say? I think he would like this one... The one thing that I think that could be developed is a bit more of a dynamic arrangement. It gets going and it sort of stays on the same level throughout the whole song. All the same it's excellent, and obviously very professionally recorded and mixed. And it's a great set of lyrics putting across an important message. A bit dense, soundwise, and maybe dropping some things out would give it more air, but that's sort of a vague suggestion. The vocal could come up and it does sound like there's some chorus or perhaps that Ensemble effect of Logic being used a bit pervasively, but that's just a guess. The chorus-y sound makes it a bit fat sounding and though it smooths out some harshness, it sounds sandy to me. Now I'm just guessing and being vaguely poetic, but maybe in some roundabout way you might get some suggestion about how to handle the mix, since according to your description this is an early attempt. It's still quite good and could work very well as it is, but it's sounding like you are looking for suggestions, which I really appreciate. |
![]() | Moviz said 177 days ago |
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What a great song and answer to a certain post (maybe you could just send him the lyrics since he's not allowed to listen to music). Anyway, love this for the sound (love the way the percussion just rolled out of the opening explosions) Lyrics are spot on, along with all the FX and instruments etc. and the melody has that 'going forward', determined sound. Vocals as always spot on. I just love this Joe, great stuff and a great 'message'. Regards M |
![]() | massa said 177 days ago |
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Great song! Liked everything of it. Right from the start! The message is also brilliant and well said. " As fodder for their selfish quest, to rouse some faithful souls. To do their shameful dirty work, to gain their earthly goals," Brilliant! Couldn't agree more. Well done! Great song! |
![]() | Skean said 177 days ago |
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Wow I love what I hear you sure Rock man:) what a great lyrics as music fits like you know...hehehe... Thanks for sharing download. Take care -- Kenta |
![]() | davisamerica said 176 days ago |
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Good Grief Charlie Brown.. :- ] Joe this is really good. I envy the mix so. topical and smart lyrics .. and a driven tune. Man ..... |
![]() | lavalamp said 176 days ago |
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Dig it Great production musically. I think it would be cool with a female voice, too. Or strictly female. It would give it a special something. I like your delivery, btw. Really cool song, my man. Groovy and a bit preachy. Dave |
![]() | TobinMueller said 175 days ago |
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Still life Reminds me of early Stills. Nice. Shalom... |
![]() | Pete_NB said 175 days ago |
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Holy! Very solid and complex. Great message of course but the song stands on it's own musical merits. As I was listening to it, I didn't find the mix to heavy or dense at first. What I found myself wanting to hear was some lightening up after "...name" at the end of the second chorus. The first couple of bars maintain the same richness as the beginning but without the vocals seemed somewhat muddier. Almost like it needs the vocal "mustard" to cut through. I'm no expert in that realm, so take my advice with a grain of salt. This is a great track! |
| Roca_Atomica said 175 days ago | |
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Open season.... Joe, in response to your "bombing run" post, I gave this song another listen. I heard it already over at MacIdol. This is a top-notch production, with a surprising and effective use of effects --- I especially like the (praying?) voices in the background in the intro. The guitar riff is cool and clear. Might like to hear some harmonized vocals on the last or last couple of choruses. The prominent high-hat that comes in at about 2:15 sounds great, but promises a dynamic build that doesn't come. How would it sound to let the high-hat run after it's introduced, then bring in a definite snare on the last verse? The song has a good groove, and it would really make the song swing if a snare was added near the end. The angry lyrics are perfect. On philosophical grounds, I couldn't agree more, although that's mostly irrelevant. Really excellent. |
![]() | thoddi said 175 days ago |
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good message Well put! Super duper performance. You're pretty good at this stuff my friend:) The powerful intro grabbed me and once the hook-line started I'm nodding to the groove. The mood you've created suits the theme well. Very pro production. Brilliant! |
![]() | Peter Greenstone said 175 days ago |
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Dig it I really like the funky melodic patterns and the way you used the sound effects. Overall, a really good sound and rhythm to it. Like others have mentioned I think it needs to be more dynamic between verse and chorus and from beginning to end. You could give it a brief suspenseful break just before the chorus which could come in with more intensity than the verse. Harmony during the chorus would probably sound good, maybe just octaves apart. In later choruses I'd kick the vocals up an octave and belt it out with commitment, building the music as well, enough to go with the more intense vocals. Then on the verse right after strip it all down. Layer all those funky parts back in there as it goes. I think that would enhance the power of the great message you have in there. Keep em' on their toes. |
![]() | VicDiesel said 175 days ago |
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Almost there This is a pretty decent mix. There's a lot happening, and it's all more or less audible. The main thing I'm missing is the bass. It's there, but I can't really hear what it's doing. Partly that's because its part is not convincing: just a note here, and note there without much rhyme or reason. I think with a song this busy the bass part should be really simple. Just one loud *thunk* at the start of every other measure, or something like that. It doesn't need to cover all those rhythmical accents that the other instruments also cover. Maybe you can EQ away some lows from the other instruments to make more space for the bass? Other than that I like this. It has drive and it sounds good. Oh, after a while the verse gets a bit repetitive: 4 identical lines, and then every verse the same as the last, and the chorus is not a major departure from it. Find a way to have line 3 go up in melody a bit? |
![]() | digitalnirvana9 said 175 days ago |
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Radio Ready Too bad they won't touch it with a 10 ft pole.....Excellent mixing and production with a searing message....kinda reminds me of the Bill Moyers piece on how the Christian Right put Bush into power.....Congratulations on taking on a hard topic with style and grace....Bravo! Peace, Norman |
![]() | guitapick said 175 days ago |
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Too many reasons... ...to fight... Propaganda to further the ends of the few...sets the wheels in motion time and time again... Great tune, Joe. Tip o' the hat to ya, brotha... |
![]() | springclock said 174 days ago |
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thunder that beginning really grabs you.... this is very well done.... awesome production and fantastic lyrics..... a topic everyone needs to consider.... you deliver these lyrics like a modern day prophet....excellent post bro....thanks so much for sharing this gem with all the other kids here at MJ.... peace....Ian |
![]() | ageofthedeathtree said 173 days ago |
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wow... first off i'd like to say this song is truly phenomenal! i mean this in every way...the writing, the performance, and the production. you nailed it man! i absolutely love, and highly agree with your lyrics. it's sad...if only people would listen... secondly, i don't understand why someone would give you bad ratings on this tune. even if they didn't agree with your lyrics, this song is superbly executed and produced. i say you did some majorly fine work here, and i for one am loving it. thank you for sharing your song! sincerely, age |
![]() | paul f. page said 173 days ago |
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We need... ...more songs like this, Joe, with powerful messages that espouse peace rather than killing. I am so glad you posted this... You have such a complex rhythm going on here and it is so very compelling. I do like your vocals very much, esp. the harmony sections. My one suggestion would be to BRING UP the vocal a tad so that it is a little easier to hear and understand. I enjoyed this very much. Peace. Paul |
![]() | guygrooves said 173 days ago |
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Hey Joe.. This is my first comment since "the thread" and I would love to suggest something to make this song stronger, but I am nowhere nearly qualified to do so. If I could have my songs sound as good as this "jam", as you put it, I would be ecstatic to say the least. I am very glad I found you through the MJ GOOC. Just listening to how you create these wonderful pieces improves my ability to mix and record. Artists like you are invaluable to this site. Ok enough with the sunshine ha ha. I really do think this is one of the finest songs I have heard in a long time. I agree with the message whole heartedly and thought the vocal had a Robbie Robertson quality to it. The melody was beautiful and I especially liked the acoustic guitar. I think when it's finished and fully produced I would most certainly buy the album it was on. The download will be what I use to tide me over. I want you to know I am one of those who rarely buys other artists music. I would buy this though. It is a terrific song and production as it sits now. |
![]() | caroline said 173 days ago |
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i listened to this when you first posted and... now i got back to comment :) - ouch - but i mean that in a good way - i sooo admire how you put all these sounds together - i listened with headphones this time - and it kept my ears occupied throughout - thank you for sharing xoxox |
![]() | HipHopMoses said 170 days ago |
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Well done I think I fall into the Caroline group. I listen earlier but failed to comment, lately I've been trying to do to many things at one time. Good writing the clav sounds familiar to me, it seems as you have a lot going on here :) maybe staggering some of the instruments will clear more space for the vocals. That's if you're looking to clear some. Moses |
![]() | rsorensen said 169 days ago |
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open season wow this is excellent in every way. heavy subject matter and you handled it perfectly. you really got my attention with those drums at the beginning and held it all the way through. Great vocal delivery. Outstanding! |
![]() | falzaabi said 165 days ago |
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hey this is so professional song , much enjoyed |
![]() | Ibstrat said 162 days ago |
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Being not a very religious person I identified with the lyrics right away.I never could figure out why God needs US to spread his message if he is all powerful. And why does he allow millions to grow up learning the "wrong" religion so they can forever burn in hell? I could go on... Anyway, I really enjoyed this song excellent all around. |
![]() | E-Frame Wrecker said 151 days ago |
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I like this song I listened to it a while back. Probably noticed when it was high up on the MJ "charts" . I really like the intro. Its very dramatic with the lightning. The main riff on the Clav sounds like a guitar. Thats a great riff. The release is nice and has a nice progression. Great song here. Really nice work with the percussion in the background. |





























great rockin protest song ...nice singing my friend
I would imagen this with wild guitars .good arrangment
powerful lyrics indeed ...Kudos ...Thnx for sharin !!!