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 | racerat said 324 days ago |
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bones This has the bones to be great. You have a couple mixing issues though. Why are all the instruments in the left channel only? The only thing that is in the right speaker at all is the drums.? Oh, and then later an organ comes in on the right a little. Pan the guitar out to center or maybe 10 degrees left off center. Main vocal center. Harmony vocal 10 degrees right. Bass center. It will be much more impactful. The song itself is really great. You have a strong voice that suits the Alt. genre of the music. The guitar work is strong too. Keep it up! |
 | timothy devine said 324 days ago |
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hey welcome eric interesting panning, makes it feel and sound live drums are great Love the stop in the intro get a catchy chorus, its in here somewhere why not the title and just add a chord or two to your outro and you have a great chorus I'd mix your vocal in the center or make a copy and put you voice on both sides and to gain a fatter vocal you could add a bit of reverb or make it rounder on one side with eq just some ideas move the bass to the center more also turn up the bass MHO you need some more balance in the mix, a second counter rhythm guitar on in the right ear, you more bass a little lead guitar bit some where, definatly in the end these are my ways and don't reflect on how this sounds overall. The over all sound of the recording is very hip I bet out of ear phones with this turned up it sounds different(cant do that now kids and wife are sleeping) i dig this tune very much and i dig the guitar sounds your voice works well with this song and you sing it with lots of confidence Good arrangement, song writing and performances peace looking forward to what else you got up your sleeve tim |
 | lengold said 324 days ago |
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Great first post Eric. Lovely songwriting, musicianship and vocals. Good advice above re the mix but the most important thing always is the song, and this is good. Cheers Len |
 | rsorensen said 324 days ago |
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sounding good! id love to hear a fuzzy distorted driving guitar in there during the verses - a la Weezer's 'Buddy Holly' - it could drop out during the break then kick back in for the last verse. I think you should keep the break quiet as it is. In fact you could start it even quieter and let it build. This has amazing potential. I'm looking very forward to hearing it develop! |
 | ajnorth said 324 days ago |
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Great potential. There's a lot going for it, but like everyone has said there are issues with the mixing. It has the makings of a great song so I look forward to hearing the next attempt. Good start! Adam |
 | Monkaton said 324 days ago |
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Good Effort I liked the song and you're right. Mixing can drive you crazy and after a while you start losing perspective. Put everything in the middle and do a mono version, then proceed from there. Good luck and welcome to Macjams. |
 | caroline said 324 days ago |
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great philosophy... good song and i wish you all the best with the mixing bit - i'm a one take and no mixing kinda girl myself (i don't do technicals) - this has the potential to be excellent - good luck and enjoy! |
 | dajama said 324 days ago |
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This is a nice song Good catchy melody, and a strong vocal performance. The song has a strong hook. Like others, I would try copying the vocal track and placing it in the middle. The guitar track in the left could work, although something on the right to balance it out might (perhaps more keys?) could be good. All of this is a bigger issue for me because I'm listening through phones so the quietness in the middle is more obvious. This is a great first post. Welcome to the neighborhood! Peace. |
 | Moviz said 324 days ago |
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Good first song here and I can hear the Lennon-ish feel in this great song. I like your vocal and the instruments and volumes. I think the mix is wrong, but you'll soon learn as we all have to here.Your execution is good, but if you follow what Racerat and Tiomothy Devine have to say about the mixing, this song will be really Hot. Do what they advise and then post it again, Welcome to MJ and cheers M |
 | davisamerica said 324 days ago |
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hello and welcome silly question from me but when you record in gb are you doing it in"mono" as opposed to "stereo"? reason i ask is cos i had this panning issue for a while.. "everything to the left" till some kind Mjammer enlightened me..lol.... if you are recording the tracks in the preset " stereo" your panning attempts are for naught... right then.. agreet with phillip.. this one has bones and has some great possibilities... wish my first post had of been as good! |
 | DWL said 324 days ago |
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Great song but ... really needs the mix to be central. I liked the guitar in the left channel to start but was surprised that nothing came in on the right. A remix and a repost I reckon :-) Welcome to MJ. Cheers Dick |
 | guitapick said 324 days ago |
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I so want... ...your Tele... ...Cool tune and the lyrics are killer. I can relate...been there before as, I'm sure, many of us have... ...be patient with the mixing. You'll get it. Tough at first. But you've got lots of people at this site who're more than willing to help. Bob |
 | Peter Greenstone said 324 days ago |
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Great first pass I think this is a great tune. I like the melody, the lyrics, and the overall structure. The production does have its issues here and there and I think this could certainly be improved to make it shine to its full potential. I'd like to hear the bass guitar and the drums have a lot more presence in the mix. I hear some mic popping in your vocals that could be eliminated if you use a pop filter when recording. In the meantime though, you can significantly reduce the popping on the existing recording by using EQ to cut out most of the bottom end frequencies on the vocal track. Generally, it sounds good to the ears but there are surely a lot of little things you can do here and there to get more out of it. I like your performance and the inflections in your singing. Really nice work. Keep playing with it. |
 | lavalamp said 324 days ago |
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Telecaster Lennon Love that Telecaster sound, man. Everything is in my right speaker, though. Except a drum. Take it off STEREO and which it to MONO. Trust me. As Racerat said the song is great and your vocals, too. Take whatever advice he gives. He semms to know what he's talking about. Dave |
 | michael2 said 323 days ago |
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great song only gripe i have is that everything is panned to one speaker. i love your voice and the whole vibe (gtr sounds awesome). actually I would like to hear some more bass in the mix. i do like the non-standard arrangement though (no chorus). nice when the harmonies come in at the end too. great job, welcome to MJ. |
 | pablatone said 323 days ago |
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very good song you can hear that it wants to be great. I think you should bring up the kick, snare and bass. Put them right up front. Hope you get some monitors soon, you got tons of talent. |
 | Aaron David said 323 days ago |
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Great start This a is a great start... definitely shows potential. I definitely agree on the comments of Racerat and others on the mixing. I've done some reading before that talk about how your brain perceives sounds/music. Apparently, your left ear is more prone to pick things out in a music track, whereas your right ear is more prone to blend the sound. With this as the case, if you want something to be noticed, pan it a bit more to the left and make your background sounds a bit more to the right. In your song, it's a bit of left ear overload :). Like racerat said, pan your vocals in the middle of you mix (in other words, don't pan them, lol) , pan your guitar a little left, other instruments a little right.... it doesn't take much (only 10-15 either side) so widen out your sound. If you want to pan something completely right, a cool technique I've been messing with lately is record to seemly identical guitar tracks, pan them to extreme opposites (100% left and 100% right) and blend them with reverb into the background. I only use them in parts where I want to build it. Even though I'm playing the same thing in both tracks, no-one's perfect, and the slightly different between the two different recordings actually widens the sound and makes it seem bigger. Give it a try sometime :) |
 | Willywagga said 323 days ago |
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Cool song Really good though like others have already things need to be centred particularly the main vocal. It's a little displacing as it is. But really great voice and great lyrics. |
 | Ibstrat said 322 days ago |
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I don't know anything about mixing- but you've got talent.This is a great song! |
 | rtcooper said 321 days ago |
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STARTERS Sounds like early Elvis Costello and THAT'S Cool. But, it seems to have forgotten about the right channel. Gonna Re-mix using whole spectrum/envelope? |
 | Bob Rodgers said 321 days ago |
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This is a great song and very good songwriting, nice break in the middle, I loved the guitars and vocals! It's already been said about the mixing and good advice from everyone, look forward to hearing more of this song! |
 | jiguma said 321 days ago |
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Like Philip said .. .. great bones! Needs a chorus, and the mix is pretty average - you'd get a huge improvement just by returning everything to the centre and slowly and slightly panning each track until it sounds right. Bass and drums could stay in the centre until you sort the vox and instruments out. I'd be leaving the vocal pretty much centred also - so that leaves the guitar and organ - one slightly left, one slightly right. A second guitar track would also help balance things a bit. See how that sounds and go from there. This song is definitely worth some more work! Neil |
 | sschedra said 315 days ago |
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Good job! You have a gift for putting together songs. I see almost everyone has given feedback on production so I don't have to. Your playing and singing are swee-eet. I really like your song writing style though and I look forward to more of your work. I share your frustration with the tech details. I always hear it perfect in my head. Now if we can just develop an interface . . . |
Coool Rockin my friend ..would love to hear
your nice singing and guitar riffs into the
middle dunno just my rusty ears ..all in all
just great !! welldone !!