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 | sloparts said 481 days ago |
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Way to go Mr, Charles This is an excellent song. Great Lyrics and beautiful harmonies. I agree that the vocal could use a little more feeling, it sounded mechanical in a way. You might try changing the bass by alternating between 2 or more different instrument sounds along with the structure of the bass line, just a little to give it a more dynamic bottom end to the song. Altogether, an excellent song the just needs a little tweaking to make it a great piece of music all the way around. Ed |
...this is really good in many ways.
It has some really interesting sections playing off each other - it shifts into the chorus nicely, and the drop out afterwards with the little piano motif works well.
Your baacking vocals are woking well on the whole and you obviously have a knack for song structure. The build up to the end is excellent.
Similar to nevermines comment I think your vox are a little dry in places - but this is something to work on. Also, the bass sound you have seems a little 'robotic' -perhaps something softer would work.
Hope you don't mind these very minor crits.
Very good work on the whole,
Phil