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![]() | drakonis said 674 days ago |
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Ahhh... there ya go! Other than not finding that elusively mythical FemmeChoir Jampack to add to this, you fixed everything I critiqued in the prior version... this is tremendous you two! Now go forth and get Mimi or EmilyR or Mysti to do the choral bits and this will be unstoppable! Awesome! ttfn, Drakonis |
| Rocha Malhada said 674 days ago | |
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Ya, Mon! Much better punch on the bass... That was quick-snappy turnaround! Guess I won't repeat myself on the other comments, but to say, Good song, good message! . - Harold |
| Alimar said 674 days ago | |
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Much more balance... ...and 'anchoring' of the driving elements. Dead centering of lead and rhythm instruments, with the selective panning of others, really add to the powerful vocals - enveloping them in a unique texture of sound. Peace, Alimar |
![]() | perceptualvortex said 674 days ago |
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Yes It seems that the bass playing (which is excellent, did I mention?) is clearer in this one. I don't know for sure, since I heard the original on my work headphones, and now I'm listening with speakers at home, but the mix does sound much improved. Bing, I really like that fact that you are able to write and produce such excellent songs with important and timely messages--delivered in a musical and even-handed manner. It's a fantastic, but under utilized, purpose for music and you really have a knack for it. |
![]() | bud said 674 days ago |
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Important message passionately played and sung. One of the things I really like about MJ is the chance to hear people speak their minds and hearts in music without "the man" getting in the middle. Power to the dulcimer! Nice work Bing and I. Spike. |
| Dadai said 674 days ago | |
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"This broke my heart..." All of it breaks my heart, too. The mindless, completely self-centered hatred and all-too-often violence in the name of one's faith. This gets pretty close to the essence of evil. Taking that which is good and using it as a justification for evil. A variation on theme that the ends justify the means. God help us. I am remind of a couple verses: ... show me your faith without works, and I by my works will show you my faith. ... let's not love in word only, neither with the tongue only, but in deed and truth. Bing, you bring a lot to your music... the least of which is not your heart. Solid song here, lyrics that should stop any listener and cause him to ponder your words. All mixed into an enjoyable rocking tune. This catches some of the anguish and lament of religious conflict that I tried to express in my song "Keep On Running" with jiguma and snowdragon. We may on some level be able to understand why man uses good for evil towards his fellow man... but I doubt we will ever be able to emotionally come to grips with it. Thanks for staying with it and finally posting it. |
| egobandit2 said 674 days ago | |
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Even better I find it hard to pick apart music, but I understand the benifits of positive critism. Most of the time I listen with an open ear the kind that says I think this is intentional, maybe chaotic, maybe improvised but the way the artist intended, or not. So I say everything is good. I went back to listen to the earlier version and then this one and yes this sounds more full, more dynamic. Excellent, still a great song either version |
![]() | Ejh said 674 days ago |
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Lately, you... ...and the artist formerly known as minigurl have impressed me with the dedication to your craft, taking comments and suggestions and then tweaking, thinking, listening, reworking... It's an admirable openness and a strength of character... I love the sound of this. I love the dulcimer, again, and I love the lead guitar... I like the bass line... those grouped vocals just get to me... And then just the sheer outright bravery of the truthtelling in the lyric... Ed |
![]() | I. Spike said 674 days ago |
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Yes!!! I really like this mix! It has more energy and power. Just to let everyone know, this is all Bing, I just had the wonderful opportunity to play bass on an already impassioned track. I dig it Bing! Solid my brotha! |
![]() | Vic Holman said 674 days ago |
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down right funky and rockin.. first i listened with out paying attention to the words, so vocally you fit right in as a musical instrument. second for the message in the lyrics. double the pleasure. excellent piece! |
![]() | digitalnirvana9 said 674 days ago |
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Ultra Timely This is what I like about your work Bing, its always right with the times and whats happening around the world....I'd like to see this one played all over the globe....Great Job and I Spike really DID nail it.....A very enthusiastic and rare 4 10's for me....Your music just keeps getting better and better....Peace, digitalnirvana9... |
![]() | apb said 674 days ago |
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Got your note .. .. I liked the first version and I still like the second version. This does sound tweaked and just that bit crisper and more polished. I Spike's singing style reminds me a bit of the singer Ed Kowalczyk from the band "Live" in this. I'd only like to hear a bit more variation in the funky rhythm part. Perhaps just some changed vocals effects to emphasis some other points eg. "slaying in the name of God". But overall these are all very minor, personal taste tweaks really. A powerful additional soulful female singer at the chorus and to bounce off of (not literally lol) in the sections after the solo. Kudos. |
| Kenta said 674 days ago | |
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Perfect I really like this REMIX yes it's almost perfect. Kudos my friend. Take care Kenta |
![]() | TobinMueller said 674 days ago |
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Perfecting Much better balance in the mix. Since you are perfecting the track, in a more demanding mode, my ears sense that you could add emotional variations to your chorus, perhaps getting more passionate and, in the end, perhaps resigned, so that the fabric of your vocal performance rises to the depth of the poetry. Your very even and well done vocals, however, are quite satisfying, but if I were in the control booth at the studio, I would suggest such a idea to you for your consideration. Excellent song. And I truly appreciate your use of criticism and desire to perfect. |
![]() | MissChaos said 674 days ago |
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*shakes head* Yes! Whooooo, this is IT!!! (and I generally hate typing more than one exclamation mark!!!) You two rock!!! There I go again.... I love the percussion presence you've added -- and I even hear the hand drums in this mix. I hadn't heard them in your earlier mix. Are those bongos/congas? Or am I hearing things again? This is smokin'. I'd love to put an organ solo over this; I'm singing it in my head. The layering on the "faith" at the end sounds much better! I still hear the darn track noise at the very end (It's the headphones man, I swear!) I need to listen through my speaker monitors. But heck, it doesn't bother me anymore, so forget I said it. :-) Solid. Brilliant songwriting. Poignant, as I said on the other mix. It's one of those songs that sticks with you. Thank you for bringing this to MacJams. Now let's get it out to the masses! |
![]() | e46 said 674 days ago |
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Very well written... Dreadmon, I really appreciate the lyrics and the message that you've got going on here. Such a world that we live in which is capable of the best of things, then turns right around and is capable of the worst. I haven't heard the first version, and after listening to this, I don't think that I want to either. This is well done, and iSpike did a fabulous job on the bass. Good on both of you! |
![]() | j2morrow said 673 days ago |
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Bing! Awesome track. Great tune and some very fresh and clever rhymes. And this is a song that really needs to be heard. Thanks for writing this and sharing it with us. An absoulte must to download. Bravo. |
![]() | Leon said 673 days ago |
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Musical evangelism What I do like about your songs in general is the message that it brings forth. There is always to a tendency for social relevance. I imagine you can easily let loose, let your hair down and just simply rock on for rocking's sake, but you choose to put more substance than just sheer fun in your music. Messages like these are remembered long after superficial fun is gone. The technical aspects of this song ain't shabby either. Very good all-around performance. |
![]() | stevel said 673 days ago |
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Good stuff Nice track...like the funky guitar sounds. Good vocals and the lyrics work without being too overwrought or preachy. Sounds like there is an organ part in there somewhere..wouldn't mind hearing that a tad louder in the mix but its a really cool sounding track overall Cheers Steve |
![]() | SmokeyVW said 672 days ago |
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pro a very professional composition, performance, and production. and i love it. a nice groove, tappin' my foot, and something in the back of my brain says "hey, you, yeah, you, play it again, and this time listen to the lyrics." so i did. "hey! louder dude." OK, OK... oh, and i like that parallel octaves on the vocals. always a fool for that. i'd put a tad more reverb in the back on that snare as it builds up. and at the very end, i feel the back up harmony needs to track the chords just a tad more, to drive it home. (no idea if that's possible. maybe you've already fought that battle and it isn't technically possible?) wow wee! excellent tune - thanks |
![]() | CIPHER said 671 days ago |
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Powerful I loved the range of your vocal expression - alternately comforting and forboding, soothing and serious. Perfect for the lyrical content. I enjoyed the song very much. It's a download. Personally, as a fan of heavier music, I'd love to hear this song taken even further. Maybe add a few big distorted guitar splashes during the chorus. That's just my taste though. I thought it would be cool to hear a complete redux on the first two lines of the second verse (Christian mobs...) with just your awesome vox and the drums before the whole thing kicks in again. One more thought was to add more high harmony vocals during the bridge. To my ear it sounded like it was missing something vocally. But these are just some thoughts. The song is fantastic. I'm sorry I missed the chance to play on this one even though Spikey did a great job. Maybe next time. Thanks. |
| Calchas said 670 days ago | |
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The first post was damn good... ...but this one is over the top Bing! As I already vented in my comment on the previous posting I won't repeat myself here. A great and timely piece my brother. Keep on rockin' in the not-so-free-world. Hypatia lives! Be well! Logos Man: http://www.macjams.com/song/28320 |
![]() | dwwave said 670 days ago |
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Sister & Brothers Rest In Peace & Inspire Dreadmon, Really Heavy Subject Man, But Dealing With Truth Is What Brings Healing and Attention to Misjustices That Confound Us All. There is no Reason to Shoot a Nun in the Back, Hang Anyone over their religious belief or non-belief. Lyrics are Superb with great Chorus and Bridge. Great Musical Riff's there too, Definately in a groove Here.Vocals have such excellent timing with the music. The Song is Excellent and the Subject Matter So Relevant. Taking a Life is so senseless and Religion seems to be the flashpoint these days for strife, shooting, bombing and maiming and people disapearing never to be seen again. We are in a World that is in Desperate Straits. Amen |
![]() | kristyjo said 670 days ago |
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Finally - a chance to comment I listened at school (where I don't sign in) and at home (where I got a 'pick up the kids' phone call) and now finally can say, "great tune, thought provoking lyrics, powerful performance." A lot of thought goes into a commentary piece like this, and I think it can spark discussion and soul-searching in this day of sound-bites. It is part of the human condition to strike out, and also part of us that needs to find rationale beyond ourselves for the hurt that we cause. Thanks for taking the time to share this song & also for remastering so it could be a stronger vehicle for your message. |
![]() | spitlogic said 670 days ago |
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Well made song A hard truth created on a solid song. |
![]() | elektronix said 669 days ago |
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You put it in my ear... Very good sound, voice and lyrics. A song, which stays in my ears and brings me to think about the text. Thanks a lot of sharing. Chapeau! elektronix |
![]() | joel c. said 668 days ago |
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Funky! I like the groove! Keep it going! |
![]() | TEXASFEEL said 667 days ago |
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Bing you have such a nice voice. The lyrics are top notch and that chord progression is out standing. Definitely Radio stuff here. Thanks for sharing... I'm quite impressed. |
![]() | jiguma said 667 days ago |
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Sorry Bing ........ ....... seems I missed the remix! Still like the song - CSNY harmonies very cool. Seems a lot tighter rhythmically with I's bass. Only change I'd make now is to slightly shift the opening percussion track forward a few ms - it seems to be slightly dragging (a very small nit indeed!!!!). Excellent stuff! Peace, Neil |
![]() | SEAC99 said 667 days ago |
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damn.. lol nice lyrics this is amazing! nice singing to better than anything i can do lol. *plays the air drums* *and.. does the happy dance. lol* Stephen! AKA ((DJ Hi-Fi)) |
![]() | ***itiswotitis*** said 648 days ago |
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great track great lyrics o soulfully sung... nice vibe to it .. funky tune mate! :D |
![]() | timothy devine said 639 days ago |
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Another great one Captivating. Gorgious. Jammin solo. Great lyric too. Nice Tim |
![]() | snakeoil said 636 days ago |
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excellent song Well performed, well written. i like the instrumentation as well. i've always thought that anyone who kills in the name of God or religion is someone who is Completely missing the point... |
![]() | Leon said 578 days ago |
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monumental message Yet another song from you with a great message. You certainly have mastered the craft of packaging the enlightening message of your lyrics with the delighful wrappings of your clear vocals, catchy melodies and lovely intrumental play. Kudos to ISpike for his contributions, too. His voice would have served a great background as well, or was that him singing in some second voice parts? |
![]() | Lennon714 said 164 days ago |
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. production sounds top tier to me. From a songwriting perspective you've really touched on something unique. It's not preachy. All sides of the issue are represented and you're very clear in your point that it's the extremists doing the damage. Very well done musically and lyrically! |





























Love that organ, vocals sound tight, with nice harmonies, acoustics fantastic, Jethro T type feel for me, love it , thanks for sharin'-MJG