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 | jgurner said 1065 days ago |
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Intricate and fun The layers and the rotating melodic and harmonic lines would make this one a fun tune for a concert band. You could build a big sound with out a huge ensemble. And the repeating lines intertwine well and though you have the parts repeating over and over, it doesn't get stale. I do agree with Drak in that the piece does seem a bit short. It sounds to me like it should have a by, dynamic ending after what's now the final fade, though I don't know how that would fit in with the rest of the suite. My only instrumentation suggestion is that as the song begins to wind down, I think Drak's suggestion of the more mellow sounding clarinet on the melody line might be a good one. As it is, it's a little jarring. (And notice, Drak, I didn't say French horn, though that would be nice too. :D ) This would be a fun piece to play, and if the MacJams Symphony Orchestra decides to get together, I'll be there with my French horn! |
| Valleyman said 1064 days ago | |
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Very nice job I really like this piece and I don't think the repetition hinders it at all. The textural and dynamic variation provide plenty of change, as you hoped they would. I helps that each insturments' part is quite good, with the central motif making a very nice melody. I especially like the penultimate cresendo and think the layering of the parts was done very well. Overall very good. |
 | Emily Rohm said 1060 days ago |
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Yes! A classical-type composer! This is really great! I read your bio, and you say you'll write for anyone who will perform your music... Well, if youever want to write an art song for me to sing, I'd jump at it! I really like the build up in this piece. The repetition works, too. I'll have to check out your other tunes! |
OK, I really like this piece, it reminds me a bit of something J.S. Bach
would write, in fact, the beginning sounded hauntingly like one of his
fugues (I can't sort them out in my head right now, I don't remember
which one). I always love the idea of repeated interlocking measures
like this, and I think the composition is very enjoyable. However, there
were some things that I would critique a bit. First of all, this sounded
like a 4/4 march, so it didn't have too much of the flowing ebb/swell of
water, even though you had ascending/descending scales behind it. I
think it might sound more fluid and rolling if it were in 6/8 or 3/4 time
(although suggesting this now is bad, sort of a pain to try to rework a
different time signature into a piece.) I love the way the instruments
come in over time and build on the power of the piece. However, when
the the saxes come in, they were much too loud at that point to me... it
was too-jarring a step... I would swap them and the much softer-but-
powerful horns that come in next, have the horns come in first at that
point, THEN have the saxes add on top at the next entry point (where
you have the horns come in now). THEN I would add the drums and
play it out for another 16 measures with everyone together, the piece
is actually a little too short, methinks. Just as it gets going, it dies
away again very quickly. You have really wonderful melodic twists and
turns in there (I like the last measures where stuff relaxes and settles),
but they all rush by quickly. Let your ideas dance on our ears a little
more before it goes away, this is really good stuff! This is sort of like
the Moldau by Smetana, letting the stream build to a river, then relax
again. Definitely something I could really get into playing in band,
though I am a biased ex-clarinettist and would prefer your sax parts
being recast to the mellower clarinets. :-)
ttfn,
Drakonis