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 | Mystified said 1137 days ago |
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Ooooh....Ancient poetry! Well, if YOU wrote it, it can't be THAT ancient (how old can dragons be? ;) I'm so glad you decided to share some original poetry here, drak! I agree the background music is perfect complement to the loss echoed in your words. Very nice! Thanks for posting this. Also, great artwork accompanying this! (This could also work for the movie "Ladyhawke"...an 'ancient' favorite of mine!) |
 | caroline said 1137 days ago |
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nicely done and i am very demanding about these things - you can appear on my stage anytime - thank you xxx |
| caroline said 1137 days ago |
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nicely done and i am very demanding about these things - you can appear on my stage anytime - thank you xxx |
 | fairy beth said 1137 days ago |
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short... but sweet. what a poet u are drak! so cool to hear your voice on this. |
 | Einarus said 1137 days ago |
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Dark... ...yet strangely beautiful. Very cool, and the background music really conveys the words. Like the delay effect as well. |
 | chakeres said 1136 days ago |
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Dark Strangely familiar circumstance as if it were a crossroad and there in lies the decision. I like the dark foreboding tone of the piece and I think the background music works well with the spoken words. Well done.-JAC |
 | MissChaos said 1136 days ago |
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Sad & Poignant Drak, Nicely done. Your poem is beautiful as is your reading of it. |
 | cjorgensen said 1136 days ago |
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Do More! I am probably the only person I know that digs short poems. Seems like everything has to be epic these days. This is a straightforward piece that doesn't have a lot of room to play, so you can't expect interplay of vocals and such. I am glad to see others doing spoken words. It's fun to go back and read stuff you did when a youth. I did this at a slam once, doing high school poetry as a lark, ended up being humbling, since no one could tell it was old! |
 | Alannah said 1135 days ago |
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Reminded of .... I'm reminded of smoke filled coffee houses and poets adding "drama" to their words .... with live readings ... good to see that the "vocal reading" still exists over the "viewable reading" you are able to emote your own emotion into the poem thus conveying the message you originally intended when writing it. My own poems of yore are currently sitting in their coccoons waiting to emerge as "songs" ..... the background music - of course - enhances the reading and is a nice touch. Well done !! |
 | Macaudion said 1134 days ago |
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I am poetically, stupid D, Poetry is usually way far over my head and this one is no exception. I am here because I promised to stop and check out what you were doing. And now I can see that my ignorance shall be for full display. I had know idea... After five listens, I thought that I 'got it'. I then proceeded to read everyone else's comments and now, I'm not sure if I 'got it'. Certainly, I don't have it enough to post any helpful comments and I didn't understand the dialogue that everyone except me, seemed by up on That being said,I do have this new opportunity to try to understand poetry better though. i will get it... You see, there's something about your social graces and ability to be very personable upon first greeting... Yes, you listened and commented on my music, which people do, but never has anyone commented from your thoughtful and unique point of view... About "Between": For now, I can tell you that you are clearly poetic. The words to this were thought provoking... I got a distinct sense of darkness, light, hope and helplessness... But mostly, it seemed that "Between" hosted a degree of levity, that can't help but to campaign for the helplessness that one typically associates with darkness... With this thought, for me, the music represented this campaign. NIce work, I'm sure.... . DionCydniko |
 | Komrade K said 1132 days ago |
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Plangent Haunting and melancholy piece - the accompaniment works extremely well with the words and the balance of speech and music is spot on. KK |
| Komrade K said 1132 days ago |
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Plangent Haunting and melancholy piece - the accompaniment works extremely well with the words and the balance of speech and music is spot on. KK |
 | rtcooper said 1132 days ago |
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Down to the Crossroads Haunting and Arresting. Anguish in Suspension, succinctly taunting as the stakes are "Between two eternities". Maddenly much for most Mortals. Fine piece. An unexpected find for me at MJ. Cooper |
| aswirlofpassion said 1131 days ago | |
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the lyrics captivated me the lyrics captivated me |
| aswirlofpassion said 1131 days ago | |
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the lyrics captivated me the lyrics captivated me |
 | aclarke said 1128 days ago |
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Wow- Excellent poetry, Drak. I thought the backdrop was very medieval sounding in nature which added a nice dramatic touch. |
 | Paul_T said 1125 days ago |
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20 years of twilight? It's been more than 20 years since you wrote the poem. Did you ever emerge from between the two eternities? I think you have. Very cool! |
| said 1124 days ago | |
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good talk What are the "two slowly dimming hopes"? You won't say, will you? This ended all too soon, as do all good things. |
 | John Stebbe said 1120 days ago |
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Cheer up! Seriously, this is a very expressive piece. You read well. Sounds like you might have auditioned for Rod Serling's part in "The Twilight Zone." Instrumentation is very well done, sounds "pro." |
 | atonalis said 1112 days ago |
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hey. wonderful poetry and reading. the strings complimented so very well. |
 | MarkHolbrook said 22 days ago |
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This is excellent The poem is beautiful and the music sets it off wonderfully! |
The poetry is beautiful and sad, and the melody of the strings
supports it really well. I can hear both the hope and the despair
in the melody. The woodwind that comes in after 'trapped'
adds a touch of sweet sadness, but I think it also helps to support
the poetic use of "two" by bringing a second instrumental voice into
it. Nice touch. Was that a deliberate symbol?
Your hours of effort show. Very cool.