What I'd like to invite is a "critique of this critique."
Leave aside whether the observations made were or were not "correct." What I'd like to know is whether this critique contains the kind of feedback that you would find useful as an artist. If not, what kind of feedback would you like to see?
For extra credit, post in this forum a critique you have received on a song that you found exceptionally useful and tell us why.
Quote by: chikoppi
I really like the character of this song. It has the smoky, 2am bar room feel that some songs from The Doors or The Grateful Dead achieve.
The instrumentation is really nice and filled with subtlety. The loosely-played drum kit, wandering piano, and plaintive guitar all contribute strong atmospheric details. Terrific underpinning by the bass.
Regarding structure, there is a very ambient, unstructured feel. The melody of the verse isn't very strong, with the lyrics delivered in snatches and occasionally by voices from the background. The refrain ("I see my father") occurs only twice (1:00 and 4:00). This is an observation, not a criticism. The structure produces great mood, but doesn't establish very strong musical themes. As a result, listening is like "going to a place" rather than "following on a journey."
The balance of the tracks is nice and the mix is clean, but I feel some great details are getting lost in the background. I might bring the piano up a bit. This is where the chord structure lays and I think more of it would create a stronger sense of motion to the whole. I'd also bring up the cymbals. They are occasionally so soft that they disappear into a hiss.
I think the wonderful ambient details of the instruments could be made stronger if you would compress individual tracks to even-out the volume of the peaks and valleys on each. A deep setting with a low ratio will retain the subtlety of the performances.
I like the treatment and placement of the lead vocals, but the track is uneven and phrases are dropping into the background. I'd recommend you use automation to carefully even-out the volume and bring all the phrases roughly parallel.
Great tune with great lyrics. You've got a really imaginative and rich accomplishment here!
I really like the character of this song. It has the smoky, 2am bar room feel that some songs from The Doors or The Grateful Dead achieve.
The instrumentation is really nice and filled with subtlety. The loosely-played drum kit, wandering piano, and plaintive guitar all contribute strong atmospheric details. Terrific underpinning by the bass.
Regarding structure, there is a very ambient, unstructured feel. The melody of the verse isn't very strong, with the lyrics delivered in snatches and occasionally by voices from the background. The refrain ("I see my father") occurs only twice (1:00 and 4:00). This is an observation, not a criticism. The structure produces great mood, but doesn't establish very strong musical themes. As a result, listening is like "going to a place" rather than "following on a journey."
The balance of the tracks is nice and the mix is clean, but I feel some great details are getting lost in the background. I might bring the piano up a bit. This is where the chord structure lays and I think more of it would create a stronger sense of motion to the whole. I'd also bring up the cymbals. They are occasionally so soft that they disappear into a hiss.
I think the wonderful ambient details of the instruments could be made stronger if you would compress individual tracks to even-out the volume of the peaks and valleys on each. A deep setting with a low ratio will retain the subtlety of the performances.
I like the treatment and placement of the lead vocals, but the track is uneven and phrases are dropping into the background. I'd recommend you use automation to carefully even-out the volume and bring all the phrases roughly parallel.
Great tune with great lyrics. You've got a really imaginative and rich accomplishment here!













